Nice work Lily, you need to be extra vigilante with your grammar though. There are parts in the symptoms that I just don't think make a lot f sense. Perhaps some punctuation is needed? Also pay particular attention to overloading the reader with a lot of scientific information with little background. You may want to add some links, like when you have a website listed you could link it to that website so the reader can access it right away.
Nice work Lily, you need to be extra vigilante with your grammar though. There are parts in the symptoms that I just don't think make a lot f sense. Perhaps some punctuation is needed? Also pay particular attention to overloading the reader with a lot of scientific information with little background. You may want to add some links, like when you have a website listed you could link it to that website so the reader can access it right away.
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